1. Posted: November 1, 2019In:

    An ex-con, out to kill a reformed paedophile, falls for the man?s protective sister.

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    dpg Singularity

    Darkhorse:I think you have a potentially interesting story.? But I still think it's makes more sense emotionally, makes for a stronger story if he was the victim of the man he seeks to kill.? It is also more congruent with the your stated theme of forgiveness.That's my 2.5 cents worth.If you don't sRead more

    Darkhorse:

    I think you have a potentially interesting story.? But I still think it’s makes more sense emotionally, makes for a stronger story if he was the victim of the man he seeks to kill.? It is also more congruent with the your stated theme of forgiveness.

    That’s my 2.5 cents worth.

    If you don’t see it that way, well, it’s your story. Write the version you want to write.? I have nothing more to contribute other than to repeat that that the logline needs to clearly state the protagonist was the victim of sexual abuse.

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  2. Posted: October 25, 2019In:

    A financially stricken screenwriter works through his crippling writer’s block with the help of a misanthropic author, to write the great American novel.

    thedarkhorse Samurai

    Hi Scott.Yeah I honestly thought there's not much conflict here.I kept thinking it's less about writer's block and more about the issues causing it. (Of which I'm not sure about - whether it's this cocky Hollywood hack having to humble himself and ask for help, or perhaps he has commitment issues, oRead more

    Hi Scott.

    Yeah I honestly thought there’s not much conflict here.

    I kept thinking it’s less about writer’s block and more about the issues causing it. (Of which I’m not sure about – whether it’s this cocky Hollywood hack having to humble himself and ask for help, or perhaps he has commitment issues, or perhaps he’s self-sabotaging himself, etc. Perhaps all of them. I dunno.)

    So yeah – this one’s still quite foggy to me.

    The misanthropic author was going to be this workaholic children’s author writing a screenplay. Meanwhile, he’s this Hollywood hack, no longer passionate about writing scripts who is taking this chance by writing a book (and thus perhaps rediscovering his love for writing and why he did it in the first place.)

    So yeah – a film for writers but it’s incredibly foggy.

    Also: this logline is part of a “Magnolia” film of sorts – I put up three other loglines/stories (the ones with the retired novelist, playwright, journalist) and they should all intertwine. It should be a love letter to writers 🙂

    (Think “Wonder Boys” meets “Magnolia”.)

    But again – it’s all very foggy and half-baked still.

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  3. Posted: October 25, 2019In:

    A journalist quits his job to write a book about a woman he’s become infatuated with – a reclusive movie star, unwilling to give him the truth.

    thedarkhorse Samurai

    Hmm.. Thus far, it's about a journalist, sick of interviewing plastic celebrities - he wants to interview someone of substance. Upon discovering this reclusive movie star - he becomes infatuated, obsesses and plans to write a book. After a lot of persistence, he manages to get an interview with thisRead more

    Hmm..

    Thus far, it’s about a journalist, sick of interviewing plastic celebrities – he wants to interview someone of substance.

    Upon discovering this reclusive movie star – he becomes infatuated, obsesses and plans to write a book.

    After a lot of persistence, he manages to get an interview with this woman. However, she parries/stonewalls and (as a great actress) feeds him fiction. His main goal is to get to the truth of her past and why she disappeared.

    In order to do so, he becomes what he hates – he seduces, charms, persuades, uses every trick in the book. He too, lies. Not only that, it becomes clear he has a hidden agenda: to write a book. And she has an agenda too: to feed him nothing but bullshit.

    Anyways, as the night goes on, they slowly (both) begin revealing the truth and he gets what he wants (but the price is: he’s exploiting this woman’s pain. By why? – Money? His integrity as a journalist?)

    All throughout, they both steadily fall in love with each other – as they realize how alike they are. Very similar trust issues.

    Anyways – that’s what I’ve got.

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