To be honest, I have no idea how to write a longline for this story.?
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The concept is about a young man, who runs away from his responsibilities as a future father, afraid of becoming as shitty and abusive father as his own. He comes upon a strange man who offers him a new life. He eventually agrees and switch bodies with normal looking body. Not long after the procedure, his new body starts rotting and needs constant supplies of human hearts, flesh, blood…anything (it will be explained in the script and it has a lot to do with the cult and the fact they want protagonists girlfriend too, don’t worry). When he refuses to do that, his mind and body starts collapsing, man is slowly dying. He starts realizing what he had and what he thrown away and wish to visit his gilfriend one last time before he dies. He finds her living with his old body, oblivious to the change (although she starts noticing that her boyfriend is not the same). Now here is the thing. This wasn’t a deal. Protagonists old body was supposed to be disposed of. Our protagonist rotting alive on a verge of death and disfigured, he has to persuade his gilfriend he is her true boyfriend and face the consequences of his actions as well as responsibilities he tried to avoid.
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with this story I want to show that sometimes people have to face what is to come and no matter how hard we try, we will have to face it sooner or later.?
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It is a story about realizing what true love means and that sacrificing yourself for your family and people close to you is better than living a long free life but alone.?
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I haven’t fully grasped the idea yet, but I want to know your opinions and how to make it better and more theme focused.