I, Little Bunny Foo Foo, incorrectly branded a monster by folklore, beat the fucking shit out of the Easter Bunny, the true candy-coated dick who uses colorful plastic eggs to prey on unsuspecting children during the holiday.

I agree with the point about the plot being a bit unclear.

That said, it is actually supposed to say "beat" as opposed to "beats" since Little Bunny Foo Foo is the one speaking in the logline, hence him saying "I, Little Bunny Foo Foo". Little Bunny Foo Foo essentially is labeling the Easter Bunny as "the true candy-coated dick" instead of Little Bunny Foo Foo, who was "incorrectly branded a monster by folklore" because of the Easter Bunny.

I wanted to elevate this a bit from the traditional cookie cutter logline by giving a sense of Little Bunny Foo Foo's unique personality/comedy.

Hopefully that clarifies things!

What is the "cookie cutter" logline?

Honestly kind of what Stephen referred to with "After discovering his rival, the popular Easter Bunny is a pedophile, Little Bunny Foo Foo struggles to defeat the Easter Bunny, avenge the abused, and save Easter."

And to be clear, there's nothing inherently wrong with what Stephen wrote. It still gets the point across.

However, I'm shooting for a logline that captures both the action (which Stephen's example does a great job of) as well as the comedy (by highlighting Little Bunny Foo Foo's comedic personality.)

By writing it in such a way that seems as if Little Bunny Foo Foo is speaking directly to the reader/audience in the first person, you capture both aspects.

I do agree though that the plot needs to be clearer though. In all fairness though I'm still in the incubator stage for this one lol.

>>I'm still in the incubator stage for this one l

Understood. One of the (underutilized, imho) uses of loglining is discovering the core concept and working out the spine of the plot before writing the script.