Read the German Version on Wattpad. My ideenarme is Estelven
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two years after Selina was gone she meets Thomas again, who has to try everything to get her out of depression and win her heart
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This is barely a coherent logline.
Selina and Thomas tell us little about your lead characters. I would guess there are a few Thomas and Selinas out there in the world 😉
So try describing your characters in a more specific, dramatic way. You can do this by adding the dramatic purpose of both man and women in your story as your character description, like a flaw which represents the need of your characters. Depressive is one, for example. You used it at the end of your logline.
What I don’t get is: did they breakup before or were just friends? They meet again, but why does Thomas have to win her heart and get her out of depression. It comes a little bit out of nowhere.
Why do they have to get together now? Why weren’t they together before if they already knew each other? Was it because of their jobs, their different lifestyles? etc.
You always have to ask yourself this: Why this story- and why right now? Why two years and not, let’s say, 10?