When a groom-to-be discovers his identical twin has been replaced by an android, they must partner up to investigate his wedding party and find those responsible for the decoy.
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When a groom-to-be discovers his identical twin has been replaced by an android, they must partner up to investigate his wedding party and find those responsible for the decoy.
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I think it’s an interesting premise but I feel like it has the potential to be really confusing for an audience. (which is OK if you’re a really experienced screenwriter) ? The investigation of the wedding party isn’t meaty enough to hang the entire the 2nd Act on, it needs more than that, something bigger needs to be uncovered for me to have a hook here, and it needs more suspense, what is at stake if they don’t find his twin brother? ?I am also missing an emotional connection, is the brother the only real family he has left? Give me a reason to really care about finding his twin.
By no means is this stuff easy, but I am hoping these points will help you to make it stronger.
It’s a interesting hook, ?one of a pair of identical twins is swapped out with an android. ?And obviously, the organic bro would be upset.
But there is just not enough apparent stakes in the logline. ?And the framework of an upcoming wedding – I ?just don’t get a sense of enough intrinsic dramatic suspense and tension.
I think the whole wedding party aspect needs to be replaced with something ?more compelling, more intriguing.
fwiw
So the android and the groom team up? Why does the android help him? He’s clearly not dangerous so why is he there. This is a good first act but flesh it out and add a clear goal and obstacles.
Agreed with all the above ?comments.
Also I can’t explain why, but the premise tickled?my?funny?bone and conjured up a 4 Weddings and a Funeral angle in my mind. Have you considered making this a comedy?