In a animated world with no trees but fake ones. A teenager looks for a real tree to get a girl, and learns from an exile about the tree guardian the Lorax and receives the last tree seed. Which he must plant before a ruling corporate thug who sells the air destroys it.

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“In a animated world with no trees but fake ones. A teenager looks for a real tree to get a girl, and learns from an exile about the tree guardian the Lorax and receives the last tree seed. Which he must plant before a ruling corporate thug who sells the air destroys it.”

Thank you for posting this, Justin.

Try linking the clauses into one sentence. Grammatically you can’t really have subclauses with full-stops.

Can you tell us what is special about the teenager? Strength/weakness?

The opening subclause “in an animated world with no trees but fake ones” sounds long… I’m sure you can trim this down to the bare essentials. What is not essential to understand the story or sell the concept, shouldn’t be in the logline.