The true story of a widow driven to battle social and governmental forces for her profoundly disabled young daughter?s equal rights, rises to become an esteemed advocate as she spearheads implementing the statewide model residential training program for intellectually challenged citizens being transferred from deplorable institutions into community settings.

The true story of a widow’s battle to overcome societal prejudice and bureaucratic resistance and win equal rights for her profoundly disabled daughter.

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I concur with Nir Shelter that the logline could be more specific as to the kind of equal rights she is fighting for. Like for her daughter’s education, for access to medical care.

However I am not so sure on the issue of the inciting incident. Normally, I would agree with Nir Shelter. But I think this might be an exception

How so? Because the aggravation that motivates her to action could be serial and cumulative.? That is, what triggers her to action might not a singular, unexpected event that completely disrupts the widow’s status quo (which is what an inciting incident is supposed to do). Rather her status quo could be that she and her daughter suffer one damn petty prejudice and insensitive insult after another.? Incidents pile up and so does her frustration until a tipping point incident triggers her to switch from being a victim of the problem to an proactive solver.

Now it could be argued that technically the tipping point incident is the inciting incident.? But does it need to be stipulated in the logline if it? only triggers action because it’s the latest in a series?? If it were the 1st and only incident she had encountered,? would she have been motivated to act?

Now if it is the case that one and only one, unexpected, life-disruptive event got her frustrated and mad enough to take action, then it ought to be included in the logline.

But if? her life was already completely disrupted by? an? series of incidents before she got frustrated enough, mad enough to take action, then I suggest that “societal prejudice and bureaucratic resistance” or similar words is good enough. The inciting, tipping point incident that provokes change is a climax of an? escalation of tension because of a? series, not a singular, out-of-nowhere plot pivot or reversal.

I think the reason the mother takes action is so obvious from her circumstances that no singular, unique disruptive inciting incident needs to be identified.