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After a crazed general conquers the mystical rainmakers, a bullied boy must raise a rebellion to defeat him, before another ?Noah?s? flood wipes out humanity.
Richiev? offers a good enhancement.? ?When your story hook is magic -- as it is in this case -- it has to be? kept central to the working out of the dramatic problem.? It should not be tossed to the periphery as it seems to be in version 1.0 of the logline in which the kid saves the day with nary aRead more
Richiev? offers a good enhancement.? ?When your story hook is magic — as it is in this case — it has to be? kept central to the working out of the dramatic problem.? It should not be tossed to the periphery as it seems to be in version 1.0 of the logline in which the kid saves the day with nary a word about doing it with any magic.
See lessA reluctant babysitter tries to spook his little sister, telling a gruesome bedtime story of a young girl?s perilous journey through a dangerous kingdom carrying her father?s living head, in search of his fleeing body.
There are a few problems with this logline, and the biggest one is the story within a story framework. You mentioned The Princess Brid, that's a great example. If you were to ask people what that film was about, most of them would say the story of Butter Cup and Wesley, not the grandfather and sickRead more
There are a few problems with this logline, and the biggest one is the story within a story framework.
You mentioned The Princess Brid, that’s a great example. If you were to ask people what that film was about, most of them would say the story of Butter Cup and Wesley, not the grandfather and sick boy. As such, the logline would describe the main story in the film (medieval times) not the modern day framework one and I think you should do the same. If you try and cram the framework story in with the medieval plot into the one logline, you’ll essentially be describing two separate (albeit connected via theme) plots – a big no-no for loglines.
To that matter, best you describe the girl’s story to make her father whole again – start at the beheading, then her action to find the body (how will she find it) and finally her goal to reconnect the head (however she does it).
See lessAs the sun rises on a quiet morning, a lone wolf ventures through a charred wasteland in search of signs of life.
Considering the second version, where is the conflict or dramatic need going to come from ? it?s wild versus wild, or in other words, a documentary. Dramatic conflict needs an out of the ordinary event that motivates a flawed main character to achieve a goal, however, in this concept you have an aniRead more
Considering the second version, where is the conflict or dramatic need going to come from ? it?s wild versus wild, or in other words, a documentary. Dramatic conflict needs an out of the ordinary event that motivates a flawed main character to achieve a goal, however, in this concept you have an animal following its survival instincts during a natural disaster. You would need to anthropomorphize the wolf to make him or her a character and then you?ll require a dramatic need to make the story work. Check out Ice Age as a good example.