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When two high school enemies discover their single parent’s newfound love, they must team up to destroy it or end up as step brothers
Great set up. I can see the movie already. Suggestion: "Two high school rivals" "two high school arch-enemies" Plural form of nemesis = nemeses. So nemesis is not, technically, accurate.
Great set up. I can see the movie already.
See lessSuggestion:
“Two high school rivals”
“two high school arch-enemies”
Plural form of nemesis = nemeses. So nemesis is not, technically, accurate.
A highly-principled, sentient robot must abet a dishonest, wannabe entrepreneur and win over his robot-hating landlady to avoid being recycled.
Here's my early morning rewrite: "A highly-principled, sentient robot is earmarked for recycling, and must unite a robot-hating grandmother with her estranged family, to avoid his doomed fate."
Here’s my early morning rewrite:
See less“A highly-principled, sentient robot is earmarked for recycling, and must unite a robot-hating grandmother with her estranged family, to avoid his doomed fate.”
Revised: After a magical species abducts their parents, to transform them into their evil emperors, their twins must find and rescue them in time.
Save 8 words with a small tweak... After an evil specie abducts their parents, the twins must rescue them before they are mutated & brainwashed as their dark emperors Q. why did i merge ?teenager and her twin? into ?the twins?? A. because it?s essentially the same, isn?t it? Q. why I kept it sepRead more
Save 8 words with a small tweak…
After an evil specie abducts their parents, the twins must rescue them before they are mutated & brainwashed as their dark emperors
Q. why did i merge ?teenager and her twin? into ?the twins??
A. because it?s essentially the same, isn?t it?
Q. why I kept it seperate before in ?a defiant teenager with her nerd twin?
A. because they made an unusual team (the bold and the brain) which can be a hook in kid?s film
Two protagonists would work better in your film since young audience will get bored watching a single kid roaming alone in vast space…
See lessThat being said, one of them should be the main protagonist,
I used “a defiant teenager with her nerdy twin” before, to exploit events such as “when the nerd kid needs saving by his-2 minute elder-sister” (my elder sister saved my wimpy a** many times lol) and it could be a running joke “i am elder, listen to me dave!”
it’s just one lousy version. Use those twins that offer the most interesting plot.
good luck with your project!