Herakles is wrongfully accused of murdering his family, he sets off to find the true killer.
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Herakles is wrongfully accused of murdering his family, he sets off to find the true killer.
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The word is awkward and the reference to Greek mythological deities is confusing. ?Isn’t Olympus the mountain home of the Greek gods rather than a deity?
Also, the logline gives the famed general two objective goals, hence, two plots. ?1] Complete 10 labors. ?2] Find the true killer. ? This violates the rule laid down by the ancient Greek philosopher in “The Poetics”: ?one objective goal, one plot to a dramatic story, ?”unity of action”.
Likewise, a logline should describe a unity of action, one ?objective goal, one plot.
There have been a few attempts at writing stories about mythological characters in a literal sense, and even fewer successful ones.
The take a way message from recent, as the kids say, EPIC FAILS – cough cough Gods Of Egypt? is to clearly define the plot and, as DPG said, with a single compelling goal before delving into the world of the mythological characters in?all its VFX wonder.
I thought in story structure you have two plot points. Is that under one plot?
Plot points are parts of one overall plot. ?And a plot is about a protagonist pursuing one objective goal. ? For your consideration, a discussion of what Aristotle meant by “unity of action” and how it applies to screenwriting. ?(Truth in advertising: ?I am the author of?replies 2 and 5 ?in the discussion thread.)
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The plot line has been streamlined, narrowed to one objective goal. ?Good. ?
However:
>>> he sets off to find the true killer, Zeus.
A mere mortal is going after the Big Guy on Mt. Olympus, Zeus? ?Is it not the case that within the rules of Greek mythology, nobody can defy the will of Zeus (and live), let alone defeat him. ?Mr. “Z” doesn’t ?have to answer to anyone for anything he does,
And how does the general know the true culprit is Mr. “Z”? ? Is his dramatic problem that after he’s framed for the murder, he must out who really did it before… well, before what?
Is he like Dr. Richard Kimble in the classic “The Fugitive”, a man who has to stay one step ahead of the law as tries to find out who really did — and why?
In one of the variations of the myths surrounding Herakles he did kill his family, his first wife Megara and the 2 children she bore him. ?But he did so with impunity because he had an alibi: ?Hera made him do it by casting a spell of madness upon him.
The issue that concerns me is: what is there so compelling about this story of a super hero who lived thousands of years ago that will interest a modern audience? ?Particularly when Herakles has to compete with modern superheroes with powers and adventures more fantastic, spectacular and epic than any of his.
There was a 2014 movie about Hercules starring ?Dwayne Johnson. ?Despite his star power, it didn’t make it’s money back at the box office. ?So there’s one strike against your concept from the git-go. ?Hercules didn’t sell — even with a major star.
And the first thing any producer who reads your logline will do before reading your script ?is check the financials on the last movie. ? What is there in your story — in the logline — that will persuade a producer that your story is going to succeed where the last film flopped?
Just saying.
fwiw