EDITED: A frustrated former big-city journalist, now stuck writing for her hometown paper, exploits a local college football scandal to re-jump start her career, but the situation quickly escalates when it threatens to expose her family?s secrets
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EDITED: A frustrated former big-city journalist, now stuck writing for her hometown paper, exploits a local college football scandal to re-jump start her career, but the situation quickly escalates when it threatens to expose her family?s secrets
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This doesn’t describe a plot rather a situation.
What is the goal, in detail, that the main character needs to achieve?
Why is she desperate now? What’s the inciting incident that motivates her to need to achieve her goal?
Generic descriptions such as “…a criminal conspiracy..” and “…connected to the local, powerhouse college football program.” should be avoided. Better if you describe the detail of the conspiracy and program that make them criminal and wrong instead of literally describing them as such.
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Post edit, most of the same comments still apply.
What is the goal, in detail, that the main character needs to achieve? How will she know her career has been jump started? Is it a Pulitzer prize she must win? Or a specific job offer she is after with one of the bigger news outlets? What ever it is it needs to be specified?in the logline.
Why is she desperate now? What?s the inciting incident that motivates her to need to jump start her career? This needs clarification in the logline.
Generic descriptions such as ??connected to the local, powerhouse college football program.? should be avoided, as they lack details necessary for a clear plot description.