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CLAY53Penpusher
Posted: August 19, 20202020-08-19T10:22:35+10:00 2020-08-19T10:22:35+10:00In: SciFi

A homeless man commits suicide, resurrects as Christ the Lord, and takes his revenge against a racist homicidal police force.

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    1. Mike Pedley Singularity
      2020-08-20T17:07:46+10:00Added an answer on August 20, 2020 at 5:07 pm

      Revenge for who? Based on your logline, the police have done nothing to this homeless guy so why is he getting revenge?

      Jesus Christ does not get revenge… that’s not how he rolls. I’m pretty sure somebody wrote a book about that a while ago.

      Why does he have to come back as Jesus anyway? Why piss off everyone who worships him with something they would/consider blasphemous when he could be resurrected as simply himself but with a mission??

      Films about race MUST have a protagonist whose life is impacted by racism. Cause and effect. If this homeless guy was black and he was the victim of police brutality, then his resurrection and subsequent vendetta against the police would be justified. I’m not sure how well this idea would be received in the current climate though.

      Hope this helps.

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      • CLAY53 Penpusher
        2020-08-20T23:19:13+10:00Replied to answer on August 20, 2020 at 11:19 pm

        Your comment helps, and I appreciate your words and the time you took the write them. The Scriptures state Revenge is the Lords. People don’t want to accept when the Lord returns, he returns with a weapon of war… Why? To get revenge against all the evil, racist, brutal police (smile)… That’s how my Lord rolls. Thank you, Mike.

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    2. CLAY53 Penpusher
      2020-08-19T10:25:30+10:00Added an answer on August 19, 2020 at 10:25 am

      My sentence structure had too many and’s so I wrote a more concise sentence

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    3. CLAY53 Penpusher
      2020-08-20T23:28:08+10:00Added an answer on August 20, 2020 at 11:28 pm

      Brutalized his entire life by an evil, racist, brutal police force, a homeless man commits suicide, resurrects as Christ the Lord, and takes revenge against a homicidal police force.

      Hi Mike, does this structure work better for you even if you do not agree philosophically?

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      • Mike Pedley Singularity
        2020-08-21T01:50:10+10:00Replied to answer on August 21, 2020 at 1:50 am

        Yeah it works better, but he doesn’t commit suicide knowing he’ll be resurrected. Plus, I thought suicide was frowned upon in pretty much all religions? With that in mind, why isn’t he killed by the police? Much stronger.

        Whether I personally agree philosophically isn’t really the issue, it’s whether your idea is considered marketable by producers.

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