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Posted: August 20, 20192019-08-20T21:51:10+10:00 2019-08-20T21:51:10+10:00In: SciFi

A long-distance couple on opposite sides of the globe trying to keep their failing relationship alive through the use of a brand-new virtual reality technology encounter problems? when they begin to lose sight of what’s real and what’s not.

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    1. giannisggeorgiou Samurai
      2019-08-22T05:48:13+10:00Added an answer on August 22, 2019 at 5:48 am

      It’s a good premise. I’m interested, but you don’t give me enough meat to sink my teeth into. I don’t get hooked.

      The VR I can imagine and it sounds cool. They have simulated dates, sim sexual encounters, even a sim family.

      And when they log out, they are back to their lonely physical realities.

      What I don’t see in the logline is the direction towards which the complication (confusing VR with R) takes the story. I get that they confuse reality with VR, since their perfect VR dates become addictive, but how does this manifest as a story progression?

      I struggle to come up with ideas about it, so I certainly hope you have some yourself. I want to get hooked.

      By the way, wasn’t the b-story in Inception similar (other than that his wife was dead)? Perhaps the fact that a similar story makes enough screentime for another movie’s b-story only should make us think that your concept needs more meat.

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    2. Bollywoodbabe Penpusher
      2019-08-24T19:15:25+10:00Added an answer on August 24, 2019 at 7:15 pm

      Interesting. Will definitely want to see it

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