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A romancing recluse yachtsman and cameo actress discover one another career tramps team up to fleece the jet set but recluses ex returns to rekindle love with revenge as a IRS sting – SuperTramps

A romancing recluse yachtsman and cameo actress discover one another career tramps team up to fleece the jet set but recluses ex returns to rekindle love with revenge as a IRS sting – SuperTramps
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    1. Penpusher

      1. What does ‘romancing’ mean in this context?
      2. What does ‘discover one another’ mean in this context? – more detail needed.
      3. I think some punctuation and grammatical correction may be needed here to clarify your meaning and intentions.
      4. What is a “Career Tramp”? Is that a grifter?
      5. What is a “jet set” in this context?
      6. Perhaps you should give the Yachtsman more detail than being a recluse… after all… once the adventure starts, he’s not particularly reclusive any more, is he? 🙂
      7. What has the Yachtsman’s ex got to do with the IRS sting, and why does she want revenge?
      8. What is the problem that needs solving and how do they solve it.
      9. What is the change/personal challenge that the main character/s need to overcome?
      10. Perhaps more detail about the actress’ character? A defining character attribute or flaw?

      good luck!

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