A single mom, a recent college graduate, and a drifter each have a chance to make 1 out of 10 half court shots for $20 million or spend 2 years in jail.
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A single mom, a recent college graduate, and a drifter each have a chance to make 1 out of 10 half court shots for $20 million or spend 2 years in jail.
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The setup establishes the situation, but not a complete plot; ?for one thing, it needs an inciting incident: ?What happened to make these 3 people eligible for the contest? ?Why of all people on the earth are they the “lucky” 3?
Also, the situation seems contrived to me ?That is, I can believe that one could win a big cash prize for scoring from the 1/2 court line — because that happens in the real world. But what kind of dramatic world do they live in that could impose such a?cruel, unusual punishment for failing? ?An arbitrary punishment that would illegal in (most of the) real world?
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Agree with DPG, also this sounds like a short 2-3 minute scene at most not a whole film.
What else happens that provides enough conflict/drama to necessitate enough action for a whole film, to that matter even enough for a 10 minute short?
Agreed. I was thinking? a disgraced TV Producer has a final chance to save his career with a pay per view event.? An event that examines the tension between greed and morality. Risk everything (family, life) for a slim, yet doable chance at an enormous amount of money? Think my other idea about Cyber Bully Revenge has a better foundation and realism. Thanks for the insight/feedback!!