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Billy14Samurai
Posted: October 6, 20192019-10-06T22:25:36+10:00 2019-10-06T22:25:36+10:00In: SciFi

A young boy must complete an ancient and deadly rite of passage to prevent being reincarnated into a dying world when his father returns

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    1. Scott Danzig Samurai
      2019-10-07T12:09:41+10:00Added an answer on October 7, 2019 at 12:09 pm

      The bit about “his father returning” is the thing I don’t follow, I think.? I’d try to include some hint of why his father returning is bad.? Also, this young boy… is not a young boy, necessarily, right?? He’s a young boy’s spirit following a premature death?? Seems like that needs to be defined better too.? Also, a rite of passage being deadly doesn’t seem a concern when you’re in the afterlife already.? It’s possible the boy is somehow doing this rite of passage in the world of the living…? if that’s the case, I don’t understand the “preventing being reincarnated” bit.

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