After he spoils a shipment of drugs, newly-wed Jim must pay back the value in full after the drug’s owners kidnap his brother-in-law.

>>After he spoils a shipment of drugs

Spoils?? Like how?? Did he lose them?? Did he destroy them?? Are the drugs illicit?

>> newly-wed

Seems irrelevant to the plot.? Because the words must be few, every word in a logline has to count, to be obviously relevant to the plot.

>>Jim

As a rule, proper names should not be used in fictional plots. More important than the character’s name in this instance is his character flaw; that is, what there is about him that got him into this fine mess and threatens to defeat his efforts to obtain the release of his brother-in-law.? What we want to know is not his name but his weakness,, his vulnerability.

>>> must pay back the value in full after the drug?s owners kidnap his brother-in-law.

Needs a ticking clock, a deadline to amp up tension, urgency.

Not sure if he was in cahoots with the bad guys and just screwed up or if he’s a totally innocent guy at the wrong place at the wrong time with the wrong people. If the former, why should the audience root for him?? If the latter, then, again, what is the character flaw that got him into the plot predicament?

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