After he?s hired on a potential bank fraud job,a budding young investigator discovers all clues lead to himself and must track down the impostor as his sworn enemy and former boss is hired on same.
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After he?s hired on a potential bank fraud job,a budding young investigator discovers all clues lead to himself and must track down the impostor as his sworn enemy and former boss is hired on same.
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When a bank examiner investigates a multi-billion dollar?financial fraud only to discover that all clues lead to himself, he must find the imposter before…before… before…?
Before what happens?? I?think the logline needs to be spiked with?big stakes (multi-billion dollars) and a ?sense of imminent jeopardy and?urgency.? What is the immediate threat to the bank?? And?to the protagonist? What is the worst thing that could happen and will happen if he doesn’t find and stop the real imposter NOW?
Why is the bank fraud only a potential? Best to make it a bank fraud job and make the stakes higher with real criminals.
The second half of the sentence has many grammar errors in it as well as a few logic flaw that make it hard to understand.
Is the ‘impostor’ he must track down the one who committed the bank fraud? Did you mean the one who tried to incriminate him? If so best to specify this as there was no mention of identity theft prior to this in the logline. Secondly is his former boss his sworn enemy as well and is this the same person who is trying to incriminate him?
Does he need to clear his name, catch the real bad guy or stop his sworn enemy or boss?
The plot is unclear because of the confusing elements above, best to specify one antagonist and one goal.