After losing her step father, a young women, now determined to find her birth parents is targeted by a deadly alien species, who turns out might just be family.

So, it’s about the a young woman whose objective goal is to find her birth parents. Okay.

And then along comes this alien species that “targets her”. ?What does that mean? ?They kidnap her? ?Try to kill her? ?Why ?of all the 8 billion people on the planet are they interested in her? ?The threat needs to be clarified. ?And so does the reason.

“Who turns out might just be family” ? Is that the reason: ?she’s genetically related to them? ?Again, a logline reader is likely to expect ?that is the case. What else can “might just be family” mean?

Now, either the script delivers on that expectation or it doesn’t. ? If it doesn’t, the reader will not be a happy camper and the script is DOA. ?If it is, say it loud, say it clear because that’s the story hook. ?A story hook is not something to hide or bury in a logline. ?It needs to be dangled out there just like fish hook to get a producer or director’s attention, get them to bite and read the script.

What’s the story hook? ?What is the bait on that hook designed to lure someone into reading the script?