DPG gave me a tip on my characters falling in love online: After connecting online with his dream girl, a country star, an agoraphobic author starts a therapy, but he must join her in public or risks losing her.

So all these years he’s been afflicted with agoraphobia — and never had therapy for it? ?How did he get diagnosed? ?How has he functioned?

I just re-viewed the only movie ?that came to mind with someone whose personal life is seriously crippled by a psychiatric disorder, “As Good As It Gets”. ?And in that movie, the main character is dragged of his isolation by events and unwittingly by other people. ?He doesn’t volunteer to change anything about himself or his life. ?And that seems more credible to me. ?And it seems to me it might?make for more conflict and tension — the sin qua non ingredients for compelling drama — if your agoraphobic is dragged out of his man-cave by circumstances, unwittingly by other people. ?If he’s forced to change against his will.

I like your intention to tell a story about a relationship between diametrical opposites, an ultra private man and an ultra public woman. ?However, I wonder if the concept could more productively leverage the description of him as a ?writer. ?Right now, his profession appears to be a throw away; it doesn’t seem to ?have any function in the working out of the plot — certainly not in the logline.

It seems to me that every word in a logline should have a should have a “job” of selling the script. ?Otherwise, it ?needs to be “fired” — cut — from the logline. ?How does his being an “author” sell the concept if she’s a country singer?

On the other foot, what if she’s a famous actress rather than a singer? ?And she’s the biggest fan of his writing? ?(As he is a fan of her acting?) What if ?she’s snapped up to the movie rights to his latest best-seller? (He is a best-seller author isn’t he? ?Because that created dramatic tension, puts him under pressure to come out of his man-cave and do PR — which he can’t do.) ?What if she totally ID’s with the lead character. ?And what if she wants to meet the guy who so totally seems to have gotten into her feminine psyche?

I’m just brainstorming randomly; ?my takeaway is that I think his being an author might be more usefully leveraged to more easily and credibly setup the initial link between them ?After all, despite their polar opposite personalities., what passion do they share? ?What do they have in common?

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