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jd099mPenpusher
Posted: August 27, 20162016-08-27T13:47:56+10:00 2016-08-27T13:47:56+10:00In: Drama

During WWII, a segregated all Japanese Regimen, is forced to join forces with an all-Black Regimen on an impossible mission to save the racist General who trained them.

During WWII, a segregated all Japanese Regimen, is forced to join forces with an all-Black Regimen on an impossible mission to save the racist General who trained them.
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    1. [Deleted User]
      2016-08-27T16:58:50+10:00Added an answer on August 27, 2016 at 4:58 pm

      This logline is fine but a few logic questions — what side were the Japanese and black people fighting on together? To my knowledge the military was never segregated during WWII. ?And why would they go and save the general if they could just, you know, let him die?

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    2. dpg Singularity
      2016-08-27T21:55:07+10:00Added an answer on August 27, 2016 at 9:55 pm

      It would strengthen the marketability of the concept if it were based on or at least “inspired by” ?a real historical incident. ?Like “Windwalkers” (2002) which was based on the actual historical fact that by speaking in their native tongue, Navajo radio techs provided a way of broadcasting military intelligence that the Japanese could not decrypt.

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    3. Neer Shelter Singularity
      2016-08-27T22:27:15+10:00Added an answer on August 27, 2016 at 10:27 pm

      The wording complicates the read and makes the concept unclear.

      Also the stakes seem low, what’s the worst that would happen should they fail?
      Is the general a mass murder killing at will? Or is he in control of nukes? There needs to be more than just a standard mission, it has to be an “or else” situation.

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