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Posted: 2018-01-02T03:37:32+10:00 In:

He lost his winning 300 grand ticket in a gust of wind then later finds it in a man’s cold dead fingers.

He lost his winning 300 grand ticket in a gust of wind then later finds it in a man’s cold dead fingers.
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    3 Reviews

    1. Singularity

      The logline sets up a situation for a plot, but it doesn’t actually deliver a plot.? ?In what way is this event an inciting incident?? What is the protagonist’s objective goal?? Who/what stands in the way?

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    2. Uberwriter

      Yep.

      This is good marketing. But if you were a producer looking for a script and you had 100 loglines to choose from (which is common), would you be bothered chancing up your one?

      I can?t tell what the story is, and time is money. Would I be willing to spend money to find out what that s story is?

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    3. Singularity

      Easy, break off the fingers, take the ticket and head to the nearest lottery office – end of story.

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