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Posted: 2016-06-02T23:23:16+10:00 In: , ,

In 1915, after a promising Australian sprinter spurns athletic glory for military glory by enlisting in the Great War, he must survive the carnage of the doomed Gallipoli campaign in Turkey.

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      Logliner

      This is good. I think the only things I would change are:

      • find a better word than “spurn” (to reject with disdain or contempt). Perhaps “forgoes” or “renounces”
      • remove “for military glory”

      It would then read as follows:

      In 1915, after a promising Australian sprinter renounces athletic glory by enlisting in the Great War, he must survive the carnage of the doomed Gallipoli campaign in Turkey.

      Or perhaps:

      In 1915, a promising Australian sprinter renounces athletic glory by enlisting in the Great War, and must survive the carnage of the doomed Gallipoli campaign in Turkey.

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      Logliner

      How is this different than the film Gallipoli staring Mel Gibson from 1981? ?In that film the log line is “Two Australian sprinters face the brutal realities of war when they are sent to fight in the Gallipoli campaign in Turkey during World War I.”

      As you see from that film’s log line you can simplify your own.

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      DylanK

      The logline I wrote is for the same 1981 film. ?What you cited from IMDB is the blurb. ?Blurbs are targeted at movie viewers. ?Loglines are targeted ?at movie makers, the money men and producers who finance and package movie projects. ?Different audiences with different interests.

      (And although ?Mel Gibson was the up and coming star, ?Mark Lee actually had the role of the main character; the film is framed around his story arc.)

      Blurbs are designed to tease movie viewers into investing a couple of hours and ?$12-$15 dollars in watching the film. ?Loglines are designed to interest movie makers in investing 2 ?(or more) years of the lives and millions of dollars in producing the film.

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