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Posted: August 27, 20192019-08-27T05:43:14+10:00 2019-08-27T05:43:14+10:00In: SciFi

In a futuristic crime-free world, self-regulated by an omnipotent social media structure, an introspective policeman, re-purposed to chase down individuals who have not met minimum popularity standards, becomes disillusioned with is role and starts a quest for a mystic island where citizen live free from digital coercion.

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    1. yqwertz Mentor
      2019-08-27T16:11:21+10:00Added an answer on August 27, 2019 at 4:11 pm

      I am not getting the sense that your MC faces a big challenge. As I see it, he buys a sailboat and sails over the ocean, where at random intervals he stops for provisions and asks the way. While I am sure there is more to your story than that, it is not coming across.

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    2. dpg Singularity
      2019-08-27T21:14:58+10:00Added an answer on August 27, 2019 at 9:14 pm

      Hmm.? The quest seems non-heroic.? The purpose of the quest in myth and drama is not to flee from the woes of the world, but to find a remedy.

      “The hero ventures forth from the world of common day into a region of supernatural; fabulous forces are there encountered and a decisive victory is won; the hero comes back from this mysterious adventure with the power to bestow boons on his fellow man.”? –Joseph Campbell (The Hero with a 1,000 Faces, p 30)

      fwiw

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    3. maxzorin Logliner
      2019-08-27T23:08:23+10:00Added an answer on August 27, 2019 at 11:08 pm

      good points. Let me rethink this a little.

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    4. dpg Singularity
      2019-08-28T01:23:12+10:00Added an answer on August 28, 2019 at 1:23 am

      I like the idea of a? cop who executes warrants for the arrest of people whose total social media scores are too low.? (Although what happens to them: must they do time in social media? re-education/rehabilitation prisons? How far have you worked through the implications of your premise, fleshed out the story world?? Maybe he could be a “re-educator” rather than a cop?)

      Whatever, the? story arc entailed in your premise seems to be that the protagonist should go from being an enforcer in this not-so-brave new world into a rebel, from being a persecutor of the downtrodden to a palladin.

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    5. maxzorin Logliner
      2019-08-28T01:34:17+10:00Added an answer on August 28, 2019 at 1:34 am

      My inspiration comes from a mix of Fahrenheit 451 (policemen re-purposed vs. fire fighters in 451) and Logan’s run (i.e. an enforcer in a dystopian world that rebels against its alienation)… but not sure how everything can fall nicely into place… not yet fully satisfied…

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