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Michael FineLogliner
In the aftermath of a high school shooting, a young popular teacher blames himself for failing to prevent it.
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Agree with Mike. The teacher blames himself for the shooting, but you want to picture a story in your logline, not just a scene or two. The main conflict of your protagonist, along with his goal (goal and main conflict should be intertwined) are not mentioned in your version yet.
He blames himself for the shooting. Why? And what does he do about it? What’s happening in the aftermath of this tragedy? Is there are a trial?
Key elements are still missing.
Interesting premise but I guess we need more information in terms of goal / journey. Then what happens? How does she deal with it? Does she join police/military? Does she try to take revenge ? Before she finally come to terms with it?
As hobbes said. You could currently be describing one scene that lasts a few seconds. We need a plot.