Noir Dramedy: Attempts by a mentally unstable and displaced young couple to forge a family with a stolen baby are jeopardized by law enforcement, a relative with vested interest, and an abusive ex-lover; their only chance of success seems to be returning to their homeland.
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Noir Dramedy: Attempts by a mentally unstable and displaced young couple to forge a family with a stolen baby are jeopardized by law enforcement, a relative with vested interest, and an abusive ex-lover; their only chance of success seems to be returning to their homeland.
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EDIT: Noir Dramedy: Attempts by a mentally unstable and displaced young couple to forge a family with a stolen baby are jeopardized by law enforcement, a relative with vested interest, and an abusive ex-lover; their only chance of success lies in returning to their homeland.
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And why should the audience root for the mentally unstable and homeless couple to succeed? They’re mental and physical instability would seem to put the baby in long term dire jeopardy. ?A baby they kidnapped, not less. Seems like they ought to fail, need to fail for the sake of the infant.
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Thank you. You have helped me clearly identify the theme to my script! I appreciate your opinion so much. I love the good old fashioned Individual Vs. Societal Norms stories.