On the cusp of the 23rd century,? our world has almost completely succumbed to global warming, forcing all inhabitants to live in one giant, multi-cultured community. Racism, greed, destruction, and chaos run amok with no end in sight. Every citizen is forced to pick up weapons to either slaughter or protect. A young adult and his best friend enlist in a government-owned team of fighters, whose main goal is to stop the spread of corruption and save humanity from the brink of extinction.

First, at 83 words, it is much too long. Try to keep a logline under 40 words, whereby shorter is better. Second, your logline is all background and setting, there is no inciting incident that kicks off the story and no objective goal for the hero to reach. Third, the hero is described in generic terms as a “young adult”, whereas he should be described in terms of strengths that will help him reach his goal, or better yet, weakness that will hinder him from reaching his goal. Finally, as this story is set in a dystopian future, it might better be classified as science fiction instead of adventure.