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On the eve of Pearl Harbor, a plucky and indomitable crop duster fights to become the first female fighter pilot in the Army Air Corps.
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Does the whole plot take place on the night before Pearl Harbour? Given that her fight to become the first female fighter pilot probably takes longer than one evening, I’m assuming not.
Is this based on a true story? If so, I would strongly suggest adding “Based on the true story of a plucky…” and I would consider making the bit about Pearl Harbour the button on the logline. I guess it depends whether you show the attack on Pearl Harbour. I would probably suggest not since it’s been shown on film quite a few times already and I actually think ending the film with her happy in the knowledge that she’s achieved the unachievable… then the warning sirens sound.
I would consider having her as just “plucky” or just “indomitable” (although I would change this to “strong-willed” or similar… it’s a bit more accessible) as I’m not sure you need both. I would go with “strong-willed” personally, fwiw.
I like this. I really hope it is a true story as that would add a lot of weight to the logline. Interested to see your answers to my questions.
No, Pearl Harbor is just an inciting event and reference point for the logline (WW2). We do not see Pearl Harbor and protagonist is not there. Do you feel ‘As Pearl Harbor approaches…’ would be better?
It is not a true story. It is historical fiction based on the Women Air Service Pilot program. They were the first women to fly for the US military, but they were not allowed in combat. (Women were only allowed in combat within past 5 years, actually.) The WASPs ferried aircraft around so the male pilots could go fight. My screenplay is about a WASP pilot who rebels against her station.
Tremendous story. I love it. Hope it’s finished.
The premise sounds interesting, but In historical fact American women were not allowed to fight on the front line in World War II, either on the ground or in the air. Women served in vital non-combat roles. They did fly military air craft to Europe — for men to fly into combat.
A movie can take liberties with historical fact for dramatic purposes — but only so far. So I don’t see what the story is here.
You are entirely correct on the historical fact. The protagonist is a Women Airforce Service Pilot (WASP). As for the rest, well…that’s where the adventure lies. :c)
So what’s the adventure given that she can’t fight with the Big Boys?
The purpose of a logline is to state (succinctly) what the adventure is. (IOW: the story hook.) A logline is not a teaser. Loglines are pitches to movie makers; teasers are pitches to movie viewers — different markets with different requirements and expectations. Movie makers want a clear, concise idea of what the adventure is.