Penpusher
Posted: 2018-02-25T08:22:30+10:00 In:

On the night of his big break, an up-and-coming comedian interrupts a pharmacy robbery, triggering a madcap chain of events as he races against the gang and the clock to get back to the theatre.

On the night of his big break, an up-and-coming comedian interrupts a pharmacy robbery, triggering a madcap chain of events as he races against the gang and the clock to get back to the theatre.
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    1. Logliner

      I like this. Seems mostly clear. I just can’t help question why the gang are chasing him, or racing him to the theatre?

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    2. Singularity

      Nice premise, I would change it so the MC is the only witness to the crime and as such, they want to kill him. He must now dodge their bullets, lose them in the streets of LA and make it to the theater on time. I would even take it one step further and describe the nature of his big break to increase the stakes. What if he was invited on to the Late Show for his career making appearance? For most comedians that’s a do or die, only for him it applies literally as well.

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