Pressured into attending a frat party, an introverted college student must face-off with an aggressive frat boy to save herself from becoming a rape victim.
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Pressured into attending a frat party, an introverted college student must face-off with an aggressive frat boy to save herself from becoming a rape victim.
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Agreed with DPG, I don’t think there is enough story in this concept for more than a short film, and a short short at that.
I also don’t see what is unique about this concept that separates it from many other stories?about rape. Unfortunately we read and hear about violence against women?more and more nowadays, as bad as it may be, what is it about this particular rape that makes it more worth making a film about than the many others?
Just to be clear, this is not an attempt to diminish the severity of the crime – I would have asked the same question if the concept was about murder.
This is a 10 minute short I wrote for a screenplay competition back in 2013. Took second place. After a couple re-writes I started submitting to other competitions (won’t learn the results for a few more months). Then came the relatively recent news reports.
You’ll notice there’s no mention of the rape taking place. It’s sort of a cautionary tale in doing all you can to avoid the situation, but knowing how to defend yourself when the situation can’t be avoided.
Oh. Thanks for the clarification. Then:
Pressured into attending a frat party, a shy college girl must face-off with an aggressive frat boy to avoid rape.
(21 words)
I still don’t see what is unique about this story that mass it more interesting than the many other rape stories in the news or in novels.
Perhaps if the sexes were reversed (there are cases of male rape victims) or if the attacker is a woman as well it would stand out, and give the story a hook.
Before coming to this site, this was my logline for this short:
A brainy college Sophomore, attending her first Frat party, must follow her instincts in order to save herself from a dangerous predator.
22 Words.
>>Also, in order to avoid making it look like I?m trying to capitalize on national headlines, I can nix the word ?rape.?
You’re needlessly handicapping yourself. ?I don’t believe that there would be penalty points for capitalizing on a current event. ?It’s SOP in the biz. ?It’s a tried-and-true, time-honored way of promoting a script. (And you wrote the script well before the Stanford scandal, right?)
So name the threat. ?Don’t leave it up to a logline reader to guess.