Seven art students, attempting to survive in a luxurious art museum while humanity ends, find that life continues in astonishing ways.
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Seven art students, attempting to survive in a luxurious art museum while humanity ends, find that life continues in astonishing ways.
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I think that I may have used the word “art” too many times and I don’t necessarily like the word astonishing. ?so here goes:
Seven art students, attempting to survive in a luxurious museum while humanity ends, find that life continues in extraordinary ways.
I think it would be better to put their predicament before their identity in this case.
Attempting to survive in a luxurious museum while humanity ends, seven art students find that life continues in extraordinary ways.
Apart from that it’s hella vague. Surely most light apocalyptic stories go the same way? I’m not sure you need that in. You may have some leeway if it’s a short film, though.
Hope it helps!
EDIT: I literally just noticed the comedy tag. Your logline sounds more like an apocalyptic drama.? So. If the comedy isn’t inherent in the setting (I don’t see it, anyway) where does the humor come from? Think on how to show that in the logline.
It’s an interesting set up for a comedy sketch. ?But I think it’s short on some specific elements for a full-fledged movie.
Casting the story with an ensembles where there are many characters but no real “main character” might work for the designated genre because comedy depends so much on the interplay of relationships. ? But, then again, it may not.
How many story threads are there? ?What’s the “A” story line and who gets tagged as the main characters in it? ?What’s the complementary “B” story line?
Other than mere survival, do they have an immediate and urgent objective goal? ?Is there any dramatic problem that demands action? ?Or do they just need to hunker down, hang out and wait until… whatever? ?Is there a ticking clock?
“Find that life continues in ?astonishing ways” is rather vague. ?And further ?loglines are about actions characters must take, not epiphanies they [finally] have.
A good reference would be This is the End, but in that particular instance it had an ensemble cast of top comedy actors playing themselves – that on it’s own is funny. Not sure how a bunch of new characters would be able to pull off a similar effect.
And as noted above, best to specify a single goal for a single protagonist.
Perhaps it could be the curator trying to use his or her pragmatism to snap a bunch of airy head artists into shape in order to survive, this way the obstacle and goal are clear. Only thing you would need tough is to add some stakes, what will happen if they don’t do what they do in specific terms? Will they get eaten by Zombies or burn up in lava what ever it is it needs to be specified.
Ah yes, “This is the End”. ?This story needs a hook, a twist, that both differentiates it from that film — and ?tops it.