Share your thoughts or advice on this logline: Faced with bankruptcy, a down-on-luck man goes through a spine-chilling experience to get money to pay for his son?s emergency operation.

>>Do l need to give everything away?

Yep. ?Everything , that is, that a movie maker is looking for.

Loglines are advertisements for the script. ?They’re designed to get someone to respond and read the script. ?If you were in the market for a car, would you respond to a car ad that didn’t tell you the make, model, year, and price of the car? ?Of course not. That is the minimum amount of information you need to know, that you want to know.

Ditto for loglines. ?There are specific elements of information movie makers are looking for. ?(As discussed under “Formula” at the top of the web page) ?If they don’t find them in your logline, they are not going to respond, not ask to read the script.

“Spine-chilling experience” ?is ?like saying in a car ad that a vehicle has 4 wheels. ?What is the specific “spine-chilling” experience in this story that makes it different from the “spine-chilling experience” in a 10,001 other movies? ?What is the unique selling feature (aka: the hook) in this story?