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Michael FineLogliner
Posted: May 17, 20212021-05-17T06:18:52+10:00 2021-05-17T06:18:52+10:00In: Television

To save a retirement home from bankruptcy, its uptight director must convince her estranged, obnoxious father to make a significant donation, or face losing her job and custody of her daughter. But when he insists on playing a role in running the home, the director must balance the need to keep her father’s money with the increasing annoyance of the home’s residents with the coarse intruder.

To save a retirement home from bankruptcy, its uptight director must convince her estranged, obnoxious father to make a significant donation, or face losing her job and custody of her daughter. But when he insists on playing a role in running the home, the director must balance the need to keep her father’s money with the increasing annoyance of the home’s residents with the coarse intruder.
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      Odie Samurai
      2021-05-18T05:15:26+10:00Added an answer on May 18, 2021 at 5:15 am

      Leaning towards:
      “An uptight director’s cash-strapped retirement home is turned topsy-turvy when accepting a bailout from her estranged father and his ensuing meddling sparks an old-folks revolt”

      Make this yours, take care.

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    2. Bo Teng Chea Penpusher
      2021-05-18T05:37:29+10:00Added an answer on May 18, 2021 at 5:37 am

      Hi Michael, your concept is great but as Odie suggested, you probably want to make it shorter to read ! Good luck on your project. Sounds like a fun movie to watch !

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    3. MitchW Logliner
      2021-05-26T20:54:12+10:00Added an answer on May 26, 2021 at 8:54 pm

      Hey,
      I think Odie’s response is an improvement. However I think it’s missing an action. At the moment there isn’t a solution to the problem in either logline which means the movie could go on forever. How does the uptight director solve her issues? When you work that out I would make sure to include it in the logline.

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      • Michael Fine Logliner
        2021-05-28T10:43:51+10:00Replied to answer on May 28, 2021 at 10:43 am

        It’s a tv show. One-camera comedy. The problem is supposed to go on forever. It’s the engine of the show.

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