Penpusher
Posted: 2021-10-01T01:43:04+10:00 In:

Two California girls must cooperate and stop a psychotic cat lady from releasing the big cats from their cages and terrorizing the school kids and the entire zoo.

Two California girls must cooperate and stop a psychotic cat lady from releasing the big cats from their cages and terrorizing the school kids and the entire zoo.
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    1. Penpusher

      Hi RallGamm97

      I find the logline as it is written a little bit confusing. Where are the cats coming from and who are the kids? Is there a school right next to the zoo? Why do only the kids and the zoo get terrorised when she releases them? Is she a zookeeper? Also, California girls is a vague description to me, and we get from the rest of the logline that they have to cooperate. Maybe try to distill this one down to the three major elements of a logline: “Protagonist +. Struggle with Antagonist + Death Stakes (literal or metaphorical).”

      For example: “Two quarrelling girls must stop a psychotic zoo keeper from unleashing the vicious great cats close to a ground school.”

      Hope the helps
      BeeZeeBee

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