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Tony ByrdPenpusher
Posted: March 2, 20202020-03-02T04:56:03+10:00 2020-03-02T04:56:03+10:00In: SciFi

A mercenary teams up with a prince to rescue a princess who was kidnapped by her father who is an evil emperor.

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      variable Uberwriter
      2020-03-03T02:42:49+10:00Added an answer on March 3, 2020 at 2:42 am
      • Since the objective goal belongs to the emperor’s daughter,
        hence this should be written with her as the protagonist
      • To invade pertains to intrusive entrance; one must be unearthly, to invade earth.
      • What’s standing in her way seems missing. What prevents her from stopping her father?
      • Is the action ‘teams up to stop her father from invading earth… set in action by when a prince falls
        for an emperor’s daughter
        or the rivalry between these families..? if not, these can be dropped out

      Good luck

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      Tony Byrd Penpusher
      2020-03-03T05:59:23+10:00Added an answer on March 3, 2020 at 5:59 am

      I revised it.

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      variable Uberwriter
      2020-03-03T16:05:56+10:00Added an answer on March 3, 2020 at 4:05 pm

      – Two childhood friends, including a mercenary and a prince falls in love with each other in space until they decide to stop an evil emperor from having the town being invaded by aliens

      • a mercenary and a prince.. who is your protagonist?
      • ‘falling in love’ should not be confused as the inciting incident.
        It doesn’t bring the story into action. Think of a specific event which makes her go against the emperor
        OR think what’s at stake. She’s in outer space, what does she have to lose with this invasion?
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      Tony Byrd Penpusher
      2020-03-04T00:05:29+10:00Added an answer on March 4, 2020 at 12:05 am

      I’m done.

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