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JustinePenpusher
Posted: September 7, 20202020-09-07T22:57:44+10:00 2020-09-07T22:57:44+10:00In: Family

When a good-for-nothing architect after a divorce is rejected by his 6 year-old son, he signs up for a competition to create the towns new playground and win back his sons respect.

I changed it a bit thanks to the good advice I was given.

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    1. Korvtraktor Penpusher
      2020-09-07T23:02:58+10:00Added an answer on September 7, 2020 at 11:02 pm

      Like the father-son relationship. Maybe have the father before the son in the logline as he is the main character. “When a looser architect gets divorced and his son turns on him, he must win a competion to create the towns new playground in order to win back the respect of his son.

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      • Justine Penpusher
        2020-09-07T23:16:40+10:00Replied to answer on September 7, 2020 at 11:16 pm

        Thank you! And of course – the father first! 🙂

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      Piotr Penpusher
      2020-09-07T23:04:44+10:00Added an answer on September 7, 2020 at 11:04 pm

      that’s cool – a great drama in intimate scale, this concept defines “success” very originally and challenges our, as an audience, expectation that it must be money/career/prestige; I read here a promise of a wise, intelligent and entertaining movie with ironic twists. I’m in 😉

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      • Justine Penpusher
        2020-09-07T23:17:28+10:00Replied to answer on September 7, 2020 at 11:17 pm

        Thank you very much!

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    3. Sonja Penpusher
      2020-09-07T23:20:31+10:00Added an answer on September 7, 2020 at 11:20 pm

      Love it, and love the previous feedback, just have to be “like that” and say that here loser would be with one o, otherwise it takes on a different meaning 🙂

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      • Justine Penpusher
        2020-09-07T23:31:42+10:00Replied to answer on September 7, 2020 at 11:31 pm

        Ha ha! Thank you Sonja!

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