When a brutal warrior is blinded in a fight, he must go with the woman he tried to save to a magic river to get his eye sight healed before they’re both hunted by a cannibal tribe.
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When a brutal warrior is blinded in a fight, he must go with the woman he tried to save to a magic river to get his eye sight healed before they’re both hunted by a cannibal tribe.
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‘He must go with the woman he tried to save to a magic river to get his eye sight healed’, I would change this to explain why he must travel with the woman, and ‘he tried to save’ would sound better if it is just ‘he saved’ and I think it would be cool if you explain what he saved her from. Unless it’s the ghost of a woman he failed to save, then I think you should specify that. Instead of ‘magic’ I would choose a less-common word, like ‘blessed’ or ‘mystical’, and ‘to get his eye sight healed’ could be shortened: ‘to heal his eyes’.