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Posted: February 28, 20162016-02-28T11:03:07+10:00 2016-02-28T11:03:07+10:00In: Examples

When a careless, charismatic small time thief impulsively kills a policeman, he must collect some money owed to him in Paris so he can flee to Italy, while trying to convince his ex-girlfriend to come along – Breathless

When a careless, charismatic small time thief impulsively kills a policeman, he must collect some money owed to him in Paris so he can flee to Italy, while trying to convince his ex-girlfriend to come along – Breathless
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    1. dpg Singularity
      2016-02-29T14:01:49+10:00Added an answer on February 29, 2016 at 2:01 pm

      When a charming but careless?petty thief impulsively kills a policeman, he must collect?money owed?him to flee?the country.
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      That’s the “A” story.

      “Convincing his ex-girlfriend to come along” is the “B” story.

      Loglines are usually about the “A” story, not the “A” and “B” story.???In this case getting the money to flee the country is?the urgent, necessary?action, what?he absolutely must do.? Getting? the girl, his ex,?to?join him is a bonus but not a requirement.

      Unless emotionally, he can’t bear to leave the country without her.? Even so,,?emotional complications, subjective needs, relationship issues are the business of the “B” story.? The?business of the “A” story, the focus of the logline, is that he needs to get the money to get out of the country.

      fwiw

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