Logliner
Posted: 2020-07-15T03:37:05+10:00 In:

When a deadly wave of Coronavirus disables most of the United States and his wife, the workaholic President must retreat to a secluded area and raise his six-year-old son alone while guiding the entire nation. In the process he learns that the former task may be harder than the latter.

When a deadly wave of Coronavirus disables most of the United States and his wife, the workaholic President must retreat to a secluded area and raise his six-year-old son alone while guiding the entire nation. In the process he learns that the former task may be harder than the latter.
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    1. Samurai

      I don’t know about this being the Coronavirus that we’re right now dealing with… half the nation thinks they can just ignore it. Plus it’s a little confusing that you’re referring to a President that actually cares. Also, disabling the United States and his wife…the wording is a little hard to parse. I’d consider saying:

      When COVID-24 disables both her country and her husband, newly elected President Alexandria Ocasio-Cortez must lead the nation through crisis while raising her six year old son in isolation.

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    2. Singularity

      Agree with Scott Danzig on the issue of gender and race of the protagonist. Time for more “woke” writing.

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    3. Logliner

      Very true, Scott! Thanks for the advice,
      MF

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    4. Penpusher

      This type of situation sounds like one that Jacinda Ardern would be smashing at. She would make the best movie hero.

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    5. Samurai

      Intention: raise six year old son. (This is interesting. One of the few times I think you could go in with a subjective/emotional through-line because the hook is strong enough.)
      Obstacle: guiding a nation.

      When he is put in isolation following a deadly pandemic, the president must raise his estranged six-year-old son, all whilst guiding a nation in strife.

      – I used “estranged” instead of “tumultuous” (which perhaps would work better?)
      – Should be innate that he’s raising his son by himself.
      – The concept is certainly unique and familiar.

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