When a high school dance instructor is accused of molesting the principal?s son, a public dance carefully choreographed to expose the real perpetrator ? to everyone?s surprise, the school?s biggest donor ? inspires school officials to rename the school?s auditorium honoring the accused.
Roberto AltoLogliner
When a high school dance instructor is accused of molesting the principal?s son, a public dance carefully choreographed to expose the real perpetrator ? to everyone?s surprise, the school?s biggest donor ? inspires school officials to rename the school?s auditorium honoring the accused.
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Robert,
Your logline presents a setup for a plot. It needs to illustrate a main character, an inciting incident, and what must be done before something happens to change an outcome forever.
I suggest that you check out the formula advice linked to this page.
Good luck
Yes, check the advice under “Formula” at the top of the web page.
The logline contains 2 spoilers: ?It gives away the Big Reveal (“expose the real perpetrator ? to everyone?s surprise, the school?s biggest donor”); and it also gives away the denouement (” inspires school officials to rename the school?s auditorium honoring the accused”).
A logline should never contain spoilers.
I think what the others are saying is to state what the hero must do and not what he ends up doing. ?This seems like a very odd movie plot to me though, to choreograph a dance rather than go to the police and even to watch a dance that might act out a molestation – it sounds too uncomfortable for me to want to tune in, much less pay money to see.