Logliner
Posted: 2020-01-03T19:44:11+10:00 In:

When a man wakes up in an unfamiliar bar with no memories, he is compelled to solve the mystery and reconsider his own relationship with death.

–

Share

    Post a review

    You must login to add an answer.

    To see everything,

    6 Reviews

    1. Best Answer
      Penpusher

      So, Memento? Also I’m struggling with “relationship with death”… doesn’t really mean anything to me on its own.

      • 0
    2. Best Answer
      Samurai

      A couple of thoughts I hope are useful:

      • Do you need ‘unfamiliar’ bar if he’s lost his memory?
      • ‘his own relationship with death’ sounds like the emphasis is on ‘own’ – if so, why? Who else is there? And how does getting his memory back relate to his mortality?
      • 0
    3. Best Answer
      Logliner

      When a man wakes up in world where people communicate through a game of Rock, Paper, Scissors, he is compelled to solve the mystery and reconsider?his relationship with death.

      • 0
    4. Best Answer
      Logliner

      When a man wakes up with no memories in the world where people interact through a game of Rock. Paper. Scissors. , he must solve the mystery of his predicament and consider his relationship with death.

      • 0
    5. Best Answer
      Singularity

      >>>Consider his relationship with? death?

      Vague, needs clarity. Specifically, what does that mean in terms of what he must do?

      And a plot is organized around one prime objective goal.? Not two.? Just one.? A logline is about the struggle to achieve that one goal. All other goals are secondary and subordinate to the prime goal — and extraneous to a loglne.

      So what is his singular primary goal: solve the mystery or “consider his relationship with death” (whatever that means)?

      ?

      And does this refer to a movie already made?? Because that’s what? “examples” are for.

      ?

      • 0
    6. Best Answer
      Logliner

      Does refer to the movie already made.

      “When a man wakes up with no memories in the world where people interact through a game of Rock. Paper. Scissors. , he must solve the mystery of his predicament.”

      • 0