When a tech company?s financial software is compromised by a terrorist group, a strategist must unravel clues from an ancient work of popular Japanese fiction to prevent the global economy from collapse.
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When a tech company?s financial software is compromised by a terrorist group, a strategist must unravel clues from an ancient work of popular Japanese fiction to prevent the global economy from collapse.
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It feels as if there are two separate and unrelated elements in this logline. It’s one thing to create curiosity, but another to create confusion and the latter is true in this case.
My point is that it would take far too many explanations, for a logline, to causally connect corporate espionage with an ancient Japanese work of popular culture.
Best to either change the way in which the main character fights the terrorist, or not describe it in the logline.
Secondly the stakes are unclear. What’s the worst that will happen should he fail? The company goes bankrupt, he’s fired and finds a job elsewhere… Really no biggi.
You’ve already described the antagonists as a group of terrorists, why not then make the stakes life or death?
Perhaps use the word “cult” rather than terrorists. ?It bring the idea of fanatics and the ancient works closer together.
My principal issue with the logline is that the facts of actual cybertheft eclipse the fiction of this concept in terms of audacity, scale and risk.
For example, the current revelations of the hacking of Swift (Society for Worldwide Interbank Financial Telecommunication), the backbone messaging system used by thousands of banks and companies to move tens of billions of dollars of transactions around the world every year.
How does this story top that?