Penpusher
Posted: 2020-05-11T16:49:54+10:00 In:

When a troubled mother is suddenly widowed and a father?s affair comes to light, devastating secrets slowly unravel, but her dysfunctional family are quick to break.

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    1. Samurai

      Jonathon, a couple of questions please:

      • Why is the mother troubled? Does she suffer from drug abuse, alcoholism, spousal abuse?
      • Why is the family dysfunctional? They were like this before he died, and they did not know about the infidelity ? what is the main reason?
      • What is the most damaging devasting secret? Another family shows up to the funeral with ties to the mob? If its a bunch of bad dad stuff, not sure it adds to your logline.

      Example:

      After being suddenly widowed by her abusive husband, an XXX mother must ?

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    2. Penpusher

      Based on your response to Odie, I think you should try and incorporate the way the husband died seeing as it’s integral to the twist: after an unexpected suicide, a troubled mother…

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