Penpusher
Posted: 2022-06-27T14:54:00+10:00 In:

When her family unexpectedly comes back into her life after years of estrangement, a young woman must confront her past and the people who will never accept her for who she is.

When her family unexpectedly comes back into her life after years of estrangement, a young woman must confront her past and the people who will never accept her for who she is.
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    6 Reviews

    1. Penpusher

      Really interested to see the story play out between the confrontation between her and her family. Maybe be specific to which family members have come back? But overall really excited to read the story.

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    2. Penpusher

      It’s really clear. I like it. My only suggestion would be to put ‘a young woman’ before the event, however I still think its a strong logline as it is.

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    3. Penpusher

      I love the amount of detail that is provided in this logline while also not giving away too much of the storyline. the only thing I would suggest would be to add in the time period as I think i remember you saying it was not set in present day.

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    4. Penpusher

      Overall it sounds great and i definitely think theres a great story there. I would just suggest maybe add more detail to the character? Maybe “A troubled young woman” ? something like that 🙂

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    5. Penpusher

      Perhaps you’ll like this. It gives me an idea that she’s old enough to have life experience and (for me) adds an element of suspense.

      A twenty-something must confront her past and the people who will never accept her for who she is when, after years of estrangement, family members come back into her life, one-by-one.

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