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Mike PedleySingularity
Posted: August 20, 20182018-08-20T20:50:51+10:00 2018-08-20T20:50:51+10:00In: Examples

When the Miami Dolphin’s mascot is kidnapped, an unorthodox pet detective is hired to track down the missing dolphin before the Superbowl.

When the Miami Dolphin’s mascot is kidnapped, an unorthodox pet detective is hired to track down the missing dolphin before the Superbowl.
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    1. Mike Pedley Singularity
      2018-08-20T21:08:16+10:00Added an answer on August 20, 2018 at 9:08 pm

      This is one of those stories where there’s a lot of additional information that could potentially improve this logline but it’s difficult to include certain bits without having to provide further explanation. His personal motivation is more for the pay check and to show up the police but it’s not directly related to the inciting incident. Speaking of which, the I.I could arguably be when Ace is hired… but this is not as interesting or visual as the actual kidnap.

      As far as Ace goes, this is one of those stories with a flat arc. The character himself doesn’t change through the course of the film. He goes from a bit of a joke to being more accepted so it’s more about the changing attitudes of those around him.

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    2. dpg Singularity
      2018-08-22T08:01:31+10:00Added an answer on August 22, 2018 at 8:01 am

      When the Miami Dolphin?s mascot is kidnapped, a goofy pet detective must rescue the dolphin by Super Bowl Sunday.
      (19 words)

      I think this revision makes the objective goal and effort more urgent.

      I would have preferred to say the protagonist has? “XX hours” or “X days” to rescue the mammal — to specify the time left on the ticking clock.? But the script is vague on that point. It only indicates that it’s Super Bowl week.

      >>>this is one of those stories with a flat arc

      That can happen; it’s “legal”.? What matters most is that as a result of the plot, somebody undergoes a transformation (whether a lot or a little).? And in this case,? as you correctly pointed out, it’s everyone else who changes, who come to appreciate him in spite of his eccentric ways.

      BTW:? I believe the kidnapping of the dolphin qualifies as the inciting incident because: 1] it upsets the status quo;? 2] It starts the chain reaction of events that constitutes the plot.? It’s the first cause, the domino that causes all the others to fall.? Mr. Ventura’s getting hired is the next domino to fall — not the first.

      fwiw

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