With the impending Ragnarok coming, a young cursed prince receives searing visions to save his aging star empire by pushing two police agents to investigate a sinister conspiracy undermining a planet’s sovereignty, only to realize they cannot escape the Ragnarok.

I’m not sure how many readers will know what a “Ragnarok” is.? I had? to google the term.? Which I should not have had to do.? ?A logline reader should never have to go online and google to find out what any word means.?

But sc-fi isn’t my metier.? And since this the kind of story that would appeal to primarily movie makers who would know the genre, they may be familiar with the term.

My takeaway is you can’t assume that a logline reader will take the micro -time to google an unfamiliar term.? Because odds are they won’t.? If they can’t immediately grasp what the story is about, they will just move onto the next logline, to one they can immediately understand.

Just saying.

Be that as it may “only to realize they cannot escape the Ragnarok” seems to be a spoiler, seems to give away how the story ends. And a logline should never give away the ending.

If “only to realize they cannot escape” is part of the inciting incident or the critical midpoint epiphany then the question is: what must they do in light of that knowledge?? What becomes the objective goal?

And who owns the objective goal?? Who is the protagonist in the story, anyway?? The “cursed prince” or the two agents?

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