In a future where writing is forbidden and technology rules, the last Scribe, and an Android implanted with humanities history must stop an evil corporation from enslaving the masses with its latest device.

Plato (and Socrates) distrusted the unwashed masses to rule themselves; ergo, philosopher-kings. So learning to reading and writing were skills that would be reserved for a small elite.

And that, it seems, to me is a more interesting concept to explore: a Socratic STEM "Republic", where literacy is a monopoly tightly controlled by an techno-oligarchy. And such literacy focuses on STEM subjects (Science, Technology, Engineering and Math). The humanities have been relegated to the delete bin.

This seems to be situation implied in the logline "an Android implanted with humanities history" -- and if that is the case, I think the logline needs a better focus.

Plato (and Socrates) distrusted the unwashed masses to rule themselves; ergo, philosopher-kings. So learning to reading and writing were skills that would be reserved for a small elite.

And that, it seems, to me is a more interesting concept to explore: a Socratic STEM "Republic", where literacy is a monopoly tightly controlled by an techno-oligarchy. And such literacy focuses on STEM subjects (Science, Technology, Engineering and Math). The humanities have been relegated to the delete bin.

This seems to be situation implied in the logline "an Android implanted with humanities history" -- and if that is the case, I think the logline needs a better focus.

In the last iteration of the logline the read is smother as it is less wordy but as DPG remarked the basic logic introduced raises more questions than it should.

Additionally what is at stake for the scribe except loosing work?
What makes this a personal story for him?
Why do they need to stop the corporation now as in what starts them off on their journeys?

Hope this helps.