1. Posted: April 9, 2020In:

    With the help of his undead lost love, a reluctant store manager must return to the island where she was slain to prevent the escape of a primitive evil before the anniversary of her death.

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    Imaginative! What significance does the 'anniversary of her death' have in relation to the escaping of the evil? What is it about the main character that makes him the only man for the job? Does the undead lover enlist his help specifically? Is it already established that the undead and the living cRead more

    Imaginative!

    • What significance does the ‘anniversary of her death’ have in relation to the escaping of the evil?
    • What is it about the main character that makes him the only man for the job? Does the undead lover enlist his help specifically? Is it already established that the undead and the living characters can communicate or is it presented as a shock?
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  2. Posted: April 8, 2020In:

    A smart but directionless food delivery boy is mistakenly given the kiss of death from a psychotic gangster and must outwit the mob in order to survive and get his life back on track

    guswakey Logliner

    Thanks for your advice Craig. I've done a rewrite that includes a MPR: When a smart but directionless pizza boy is mistakenly given the kiss of death by a psychotic crime boss, he must outrun the mob to survive, but when his family is threatened, he must find the mobster and persuade him to call offRead more

    Thanks for your advice Craig.

    I’ve done a rewrite that includes a MPR:

    When a smart but directionless pizza boy is mistakenly given the kiss of death by a psychotic crime boss, he must outrun the mob to survive, but when his family is threatened, he must find the mobster and persuade him to call off the hit.

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  3. Posted: April 6, 2020In:

    After killing its progeny as part of an initiation hunting family ritual, a man and his teenage son must protect themselves from a horrid beast that hunts in the dark and feeds upon human skin.

    guswakey Logliner

    With regards to the beast hunting only at night- are the father and son stuck somewhere they can't easily get away from, or can the night time have more of a significance? I'm thinking of Quiet Place, Birdbox and It Comes at Night as examples of stories where the enemy attacks happen at a certain tiRead more

    With regards to the beast hunting only at night- are the father and son stuck somewhere they can’t easily get away from, or can the night time have more of a significance? I’m thinking of Quiet Place, Birdbox and It Comes at Night as examples of stories where the enemy attacks happen at a certain time or for a certain reason and the characters have to work around that in order to survive.

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