1. Posted: October 2, 2020In:

    A murdered ex-con is resurrected and blessed with the power to heal. He must learn to be a saint when others would rather him be a sinner.

    bryancc Penpusher

    Thanks for the feedback, here is a rewrite of the logline. A murdered ex con is resurrected and blessed with the power to heal. He must now become a righteous man but his former criminal colleagues wish to drag him back into his old ways.

    Thanks for the feedback, here is a rewrite of the logline.

    A murdered ex con is resurrected and blessed with the power to heal. He must now become a righteous man but his former criminal colleagues wish to drag him back into his old ways.

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  2. Posted: September 27, 2020In:

    A team of intrepid explorers develop the first faster than light drive to take humanity to the stars. The only thing in their way is humanity itself.

    bryancc Penpusher

    I agree, that the second attempt is better, but maybe it would be worth expanding on the reasons for the governments and corporations wanting this technology. Are they trying to reach the stars because they have discovered some valuable minerals that are not available on earth and can make billionsRead more

    I agree, that the second attempt is better, but maybe it would be worth expanding on the reasons for the governments and corporations wanting this technology. Are they trying to reach the stars because they have discovered some valuable minerals that are not available on earth and can make billions of dollars for these corporations and governments?

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  3. Posted: September 29, 2020In:

    In the middle of Nazi Germany, a shy girl and her imaginary monster try to rescue her father, who has disappeared.

    bryancc Penpusher

    An interesting and clear log line that puts the heart of the story front and center. It would certainly make me want to see the movie. Good job.

    An interesting and clear log line that puts the heart of the story front and center. It would certainly make me want to see the movie. Good job.

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