1. Posted: July 7, 2016In:

    When his grades slip too much for regular coursework to fix, an impulsive prankster must complete community service without incident at a strict military school to graduate junior high with his best friends.

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    If this is an absurdist comedy, I don't think the implausible premise would be a hindrance. If it is such a farce, I suggest writing it in a way that makes it clear.

    If this is an absurdist comedy, I don’t think the implausible premise would be a hindrance. If it is such a farce, I suggest writing it in a way that makes it clear.

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  2. Posted: July 7, 2016In:

    A bookstore owner must re-live his father’s murder, stay alive, and protect his friends when the murderer escapes from an asylum transfer.

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    By "relive," do you mean he has to experience the murder from his father's perspective?

    By “relive,” do you mean he has to experience the murder from his father’s perspective?

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  3. Posted: July 6, 2016In:

    An amateur actress at a haunted house attraction struggles with her decision to stay at the job she loves while trying to get over a guy who isn’t easy to get over..

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    Is "ladykiller" a term people still use? I like it, but I wonder if people might think you're referring to a murderer as opposed to a player.

    Is “ladykiller” a term people still use? I like it, but I wonder if people might think you’re referring to a murderer as opposed to a player.

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